Away from the NV bubble

And so... a mere month (longer?) after getting caught in the New Voices bubble I have returned to my keyboard and began writing again. To do this I splashed out £230 on a notebook, £230 I really don't have but I did manage to resist the Ipad despite spending long, lingering minutes stroking it surreptitiously avoiding the suspicious glares of the Comet men. My little notebook may not be so super sexy sleek or cool but it has a portable charm of its own and this week it has proved invaluable. I took it to the gym Friday and after tennis, spent 3 hours rewriting Chapt 1, latte to one side, trying to block out the baby bore Yummy Mummy with the carrying voice and her screeching child. A further 3 hours work, also at the gym today(small daughter was rather hilariously in a tennis tournament. Luckily she is very non competitive). So six hours of revision, editing, rewriting I have a new Chapt 1. Half the description and the flashback scenes gone, more dialogue, all in the present. Is it better? God, I do not know! My main worry is that the characters don't come across as real, that the emotional conflict isn't present and palpable. I know I can do description, can conjure up an atmosphere and I am a lot more confident with dialogue. But living, breathing, believable characters? Better ask my Crit group I suppose...